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critique for DarkFlame75 by CosmicUnicorn critique for DarkFlame75 by CosmicUnicorn
Critique for :icondarkflame75: on their piece, "Never Forgotten"

...Looking at it some more.. I'd also move her tail so it's more droopy. This would help convey her sad emotions, as well as break the parallel it currently has with the horizon line.
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frong Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
All these changes make sense, except for taking out the tree. I didn't think the tree was causing any problems, nor did it seem pointless to me at all. Burying a lost loved one beneath a tree is a classic literary element that never really gets old, IMO, so I'd leave that in. Everything else that's been altered is a nice improvement.
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PonyRelated Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
Just removing the tree really helped. My eye instantly went from her shoulder, at first glance, to her face. From the start of her tail over feels really empty. There is no more mountainous background and seemingly nothing between her tail and her back legs. All and all, the finished product was really good.
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The-Chaos-Controller Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no offense but I think i like the origional better. It just felt like it was more of a scene rather than an image with a backdrop. The end result just feels too empty.
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elgregorPL Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Yeah, critiques! I love them.

But removal of the tree made it look weird at first glance. IDK why.
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CosmicUnicorn Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Just a drastic change--emphasized by the fact that I raised the top of the canvas while lowering the horizon.
...suddenly... sky!

:p
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anzul Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student General Artist
canterlot castle FAR away in the BG would have been nice :V

saying it because at first i though those rocks were the castle and it made for a good sense of... far-away-ness? lonelyness?
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DarkFlame75 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
Actually, those rocks were the castle.

I didn't do a good job emphasizing that.
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anzul Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
heh... maybe my mind just filed in the blanks :)
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Atvana Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
I had to favourite it just because you make such valid points. A beautiful image from the start, and beautiful critique as well!
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rumblealex Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well holy crap.

I'll just write down all those little details I should check whenever I draw something .. Damn.. There's just so much we can learn from a single explanation!
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