This is wonderful. I told myself earlier that I liked your original better, but after flipping through this a few more times I can see that it actually is a great improvement on something already so great. I'd love to see how you handle the rest of the comic in it's more fleshed out way. Are you planning on continuing it?
I just found out you were re-doing this! And I must say I absolutely love it! Everything is improved! And I didn't think you could improve on perfection! You apparently can however, amazing story, to me it is cannon, nothing else could be as good of an back story! NOTHING!
There are few things as beautiful as the moon set like a gem into the reflection of the mountains in lakes made of water so crystal clear, and you gaze into that mirror and feel like your soul is drifting through space as you watch the stars swirling in the cold.
Celestia I do love, for her warmth embraces me and makes my heart race on those hot summer days, but Luna... she captured my heart, and her loneliness makes my soul scream, begging to hold her and hug her fears and nightmares away... Were I real... I'm not real, to be honest... ...I, Freehoof of the northern marches, am but a figment of another being's imagination, doomed to remain a prisoner of fantastical worlds, tortured by the irony of my name as I struggle to free myself of these bonds. Naught exists of me but what is seen in the mind's eye and perhaps the occasional phantom of my visage is set to paper. I am but a soul lost in a swirling pool of thoughts and emotions, none of which are mine. Yet, it is an existence of sorts, and I am grateful for that. To be able to feel, even if the feelings do not belong to me, is a gift. I exist, though I am but a fragment of another. I exist, and Luna, but a wraith of others herself, possesses my heart. In my dreams, I fly with you through the cosmos, Luna... fortunately, the lack of wings matters little in the reveries of slumber.
BTW, Cosmic, I love the extent to which your art moves my mind to expound on the emotions and thoughts I experience while contemplating all it's little details, like the rainbow reflected in the lake, or Celestia's tail laden with moisture and resting in the mud. You're art is inspiring.
Wow. I'm not at all a fan of MLP, never even watched it, but your comic and the way you executed it is just, I can't even put it into words, it's extraordinary! I loved it so much! (Had Jo Blankenburg's album Elysium playing in the background which gave the whole comic a blasting effect in my head.) The whole thing is like a picture book. Wonderful! This should be printed and sold a 1000 times!
It's nice to see such a beautiful idea brought to completion in it's creator's eyes. The artwork is AMAZING and the pacing of the panels has only added to it. I am, however unsure of the rewrite. Previously the words flowed much like poetry, and now... well, maybe I just don't like change, but in 5-6-7 just didn't read as well as the sketches. There was some wonderful irony in a spirit of Chaos being so eloquent and poetic, at least in my mind...